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Offline Gustavo

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"The Pirates' Chronicles"
« Reply #20 on: August 18, 2008, 02:48:49 »


This story and plot are really developing now Gus - would it be OK for me to split this thread into story posts and comment posts? It might be easier for people to follow the action, which is really hotting up, with eight different characters, not counting Frenum and Sir Elmo the cat.

Hello, Martin :) I'll begin from the end. I'd like to maintain these posts connected still a bit longer. However, I did post an "index" and eventually, maybe I will put on a blog like I did with Elmo & Fletcher ... I'm willing to put all the playmostories in the same blog, though, & this is why I've been waiting to make posts on pirates there. But for the moment, I'd like to maintain these parts of the map plot in the same thread. Maybe, if I come to see that it goes uncomfortable in the future, I'll may ask your help on this.

Thanks for the suggestion, though. I'd like to hear other playmofriends ideas on how the story is running for readers, so as to make it better to be read :yup:, but it seems that they're either enjoying or passing by without taking attention to them. (At least I've had feedback from Anne & Gordon, who are enjoying the stories -- Gordon likes Elmo & Fletcher more, up till now ... Let's see if it keeps like this ;D ... & you, who seems to be liking these pirate plots better, aye? ::) )

Anyway, the index is in the News board, link below. & The hint is to open and read all the first story before, and, after that, open the second, read it all along, and after that, open the third one. If someone opens the third before his/her computer having loaded down the pictures above, he (or she) will have a bit of awkward feeling that the story is running away: it's because the computer is loading down all the pictures of how many may be the stories above, so, it'll slip down, and down, until it's complete. But, if you open the first first, the second after the first, & the third after the two before, it doesn't happen, and the index works out perfectly. (I have to put this info in the blog, because the same happens with the "Fletcher's New Place" plotline, which is all along one same thread.

So, "Pirates Stories" Index, in the News board: http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/index.php?topic=2489.msg28142#msg28142

I'm making this as an experiment, so, before doing any splitting episodes, I'd like to hear from other playmofriends, what they think. But thanks again for the suggestion. I'll keep it in my thoughts.

[Ooops!!! Got it wrong what you said once again, Martin ... Sorry, not the first time it happens ... Lack of attention in the reading, as well as reading to fast. I shouldn't do that!

So, let me go into this again, from the beginning:



This story and plot are really developing now Gus - would it be OK for me to split this thread into story posts and comment posts? It might be easier for people to follow the action, which is really hotting up, with eight different characters, not counting Frenum and Sir Elmo the cat.

If you have the pacience of splitting the whole thing in an uninterrupted storyline & a commentaries thread apart, it'd be great for the exact reason you spotted! ... ;D So, if you can, do it please! :yup: I'll be very happy about it, as well as the readers, I believe! (Starting by you, who like to comment on them :) ) / G.]



I like the use of the mirror as stage dressing, and the marble table - you do very well with your props and backgrounds. I also like the klicky eye-level view, puts the viewer in amongst the action.


ON STAGE MATTERS ;D

It's GREAT to use my (very small) mirror as a playmomirror, because it's like a giant mirror in a rich gentleman's house :yup: ... (& Its colour quite helps, don't you think? :) )

Concerning the "marble table", it was quite a luck that I came by it, when I moved, recently, but, as soon as I spotted it, I thought "hm!!!: table!!! ;D". & It did came out nicely, I love it too. EVEN with the bad ("hypermetropic") eyesight (focus) of my poor camera, it's possible to see some of the reflex of the klickys on the table ... That effect made me really happy, & surprised :)! (Specially because of the poor condition of the camera that I'm using here ...)

More on the "camera topic" in the Little Theatre thread, http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/index.php?topic=2490.msg28178#msg28178



I have a feeling that Aubrey, Joe and Gus will have more problems before they take delivery of their boats.

Glad they got through this meeting without bloodshed, it was touch and go there for a while.


Now I go through all three parts of the map story, I see it was Italian Bart eavesdropping on Aubrey's conversation with Joe - I missed that before.

So Dan Davies is going to"acquire" a couple of boats for Aubrey, Joe and Gus, but Jim and Italian Bart are likely to throw a spanner in the works somehow.


ON PLOT 8}
No worries here, Playmofriends : I'm not telling either the end or even the sequencing of the plot ::) It's actually HIGHLY classified to any writer who worries about his own reputation! ;)

It's great that you noticed that it was Italian Bart evesdropping Joe & Aubrey, in the first part ... It was! ;D

Be prepared for more characters, by the way ... Someone's been sending a lot o' pirates ... 'Have to use them all! ;D They ALL have names already, and I'm making plots like crazy, so as to see how to better introduce each 8}

( :love: 'Love the job!!! :yup: )

The pirates stories are full of details. If there's anything you don't understand (& it's worthed to all Playmofriends! :) ), do tell me. It might be obscure, here & there, however, there's a lot of things to happen, so : :evilplan:

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Thanks for posting a feedback, Martin!
It helps a lot!


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"The Pirates' Chronicles"
« Reply #21 on: August 18, 2008, 03:54:35 »

Thanks for the suggestion, though. I'd like to hear other playmofriends ideas on how the story is running for readers, so as to make it better to be read :yup:, but it seems that they're either enjoying or passing by without taking attention to them. (At least I've had feedback from Anne & Gordon, who are enjoying the stories -- Gordon likes Elmo & Fletcher more, up till now ... Let's see if it keeps like this ;D ... & you, who seems to be liking these pirate plots better, aye? ::) )


Hm ... Never mention people, cause you'll end up being unfair about not mentioning someone ... Richard showed as well kind interest for Elmo & Fletcher ... & Tim seems to be kind of following all of them, as well. (He neither manifested or showed any preferences ... :P )

(&, Whoever else ... I'm sorry if I didn't mention somebody else (i.e. you, whoever you might be, who's reading this 8} ) ...)



ON PLOT 8}

It's great that you noticed that it was Italian Bart evesdropping Joe & Aubrey, in the first part ... It was! ;D

Be prepared for more characters, by the way ... Someone's been sending a lot o' pirates ... 'Have to use them all! ;D They ALL have names already, and I'm making plots like crazy, so as to see how to better introduce each 8}



I'll only add one more thing: a list of characters, the ones shown, & the ones mentioned:

CHARACTERS WHO HAVE APPEARED
(In order of appearance)

~ Frenam (don Frenan Diego (?)), the skull of a Spaniard
~ Joe ("Joe" Cartagena), a rum runner (? ;D ) wealthy (free) man, in the Caribbean islands
~ Carpenter ("Aubrey" Carpenter), a ... well, he likes to visit friends, and drink with (& from) them!
~ Gus (Gustaf Johnson), a boy, in search of his lost brother, whose name, although not mentioned, happens to be Tim ...
~ Woodleg Jim (James Baker), a man of questionable reputation, who's lost everything because of the Governor's strict policy against piracy
~ Italian Bart (Bartolomeo (Italian surname?)); according to Woodleg Jim, Italian Bart has something to do with the Governor; Bart said that he might have had business with Aubrey Carpenter, so, they might be familiar (? :evilplan: ); up till now, we know that he is an attendant at Dan Davies' house ...
~ Dan Davies (Daniel Davies), a renegate British Marines officer; he might have been considered dangerous to the service of His Magesty, possibly for having passed information to the French, "they say ..." ;)
~ Black Phil (his story will still be told, so, I won't tell much more here than that he's) an "associate" of Dan Davies
~ Tareja Key (Chain ;D ), same as Black Phil

CHARACTERS WHO HAVE BEEN MENTIONED

~ Roy, an associate of Woodleg Jim
~ Old Vinegar (Billy Vinegar, William (don't know his actual surname ...)), old friend and associate of Joe Cartagena, who died in a plot in which pirates boarded their ship, and stole their rum shipment (...)

OTHER important "CHARACTERS"

~ There's a parrot, at W. Jim's place ...
~ Jim's chicken! ;D
~ little Sir Elmo, Dan's cat

NEXT ...

You'll have to wait! :wave:


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Re: "The Pirates' Chronicles"
« Reply #22 on: August 18, 2008, 09:59:19 »
So, let me go into this again, from the beginning:

If you have the patience of splitting the whole thing in an uninterrupted storyline & a commentaries thread apart, it'd be great for the exact reason you spotted! ... ;D So, if you can, do it please! :yup: I'll be very happy about it, as well as the readers, I believe! (Starting by you, who like to comment on them :) ) / G.]
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Done, after a couple of hiccups due to user error.  :-[

I think it's easier to read the story this way, though it may make the comments harder to link back to a particular post - see what you think, they can be recombined if preferred.

cheers,  Martin


p.s. it was Italian Bart's white scarf that gave it away!

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Re: "The Pirates' Chronicles" - comments thread
« Reply #23 on: August 19, 2008, 01:47:13 »
Salve, Gustabone--

Historia tua fuit ... "Gustabonis" (de Gustabonis vel simile opere Gustabone scriptae).  Dictus est melior?  Quid plus dicere possum?  Historiae tuae...  honestes essemus... de luna descenderunt.

Sed, plus da.

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Re: "The Pirates' Chronicles" - comments thread
« Reply #24 on: August 19, 2008, 03:27:40 »
Euge, Timothelle :lol:

Loquerisne tu ipse, aut Babelfish? ...
Si loqueris tu, bene facis ... Melius, dicere possum, quam poteram ego, qui clausus esse sentio ... :-\

Aliquid de quo spem non habebam ad faciendum non hic, Playmofriendibus ...

Recte ... Bene!

Vale!
Angliscaque sed in lingua sequor, ad aliorum Playmofriendum beneficium ...

~ Gustabonus scribit haec uerba ~
qui P. Oliua Guga ut Romanus uir,
de Romanis seminibus, uia Medieualias,
descendo ... Hebraeis de Romanis, sed Romanis!

Quod est quia hoc signum facio:


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Sed Gustabonus me appellare potes, si tibi placet ... Bonum nomen est.
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Re: "The Pirates' Chronicles"
« Reply #25 on: August 19, 2008, 03:34:41 »
Done, after a couple of hiccups due to user error.  :-[

I think it's easier to read the story this way, though it may make the comments harder to link back to a particular post - see what you think, they can be recombined if preferred.


No doubt, it's much better split apart stories & comments!

Thanks for doing it, Martin! I'm sure it'll be more comfortable to everyone! :yup:



p.s. it was Italian Bart's white scarf that gave it away!

Nice! ;D

'Bought some material (paper) for a specific scenario I'll need soon ... 8}

It's wonderful playtime! 'Wish I had MORE time to spend on doing these things!! :-\ Weekend looks so far away!!
Well ... It'll come.


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« Reply #26 on: August 19, 2008, 12:30:41 »
Loquerisne tu ipse, aut Babelfish? ...

P. Olive Guge, si vales, valeo.

Loquerisne tu ipse, aut Babelfish? ...

Annis tribus in "schola alta" (schola ante universitade) didici.

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« Reply #27 on: August 20, 2008, 02:44:25 »


Recte ... Aliquo cum loqui habeo, nam cogito!

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Re: "The Pirates' Chronicles" - comments thread
« Reply #28 on: August 21, 2008, 04:19:21 »
ERRATUM

If you all take a look at my stories, you'll see that NONE OF THEM is edited. I prefer to maintain mistakes in the threads than editting them. (I think it makes them more genuine ...)

I like dearly this comments thread, because I'll may post here some of the things I find wrong, in the stories ... Such as the one below, that I actually wrote wrong.



DAN How humanistic of you, Aubrey-me-boy! I'm deeply moved, I am! So, once you won't tell me what it's all about, you'll have to pay: I can dispose you two boats, two pieces of ten [five] in gold each!
CARP I have no chrome, Dan ; four pieces of two each, non-chromed silver!
DAN You're miserable! Three gold -- non-chrome, ne'er expected you to have chrome anyway! --, so three gold pieces of two, one silver, and it's a low price: it's take it or loose it! Unless you're beginning to think that it'll be worth telling me a bit more ...
CARP Where am I supposed to take such amount of money? You're out of your mind!





I've made a sort of scale for giving the proper value of each kind of playmocoins,
so, in my stories, it's like this:

chrome gold = more valuable
non-chrome gold = very valuable
non-chrome silver = popular

&

1 non-chrome gold = many non-chrome silver (not sure of the amount yet, if 5, 8, 10 ...)

(I'll find out. Maybe you will help me with it, Playmofriends! 8} )


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Re: "The Pirates' Chronicles" - comments thread
« Reply #29 on: August 21, 2008, 07:43:56 »
As all the coins come in denominations of 1, 2 and 5, it would seem sensible to have

10 silver = 1 dull gold
10 dull gold = 1 shiny gold

8 might be fun (pieces of eight) but I think decimal is easier.

So Gus, we now have to set a scale of monetary values for things!

If 1 silver is the smallest value coin, then a loaf of bread might be 1 silver, a cooked chicken 2 silvers etc.

So how much might a small rowing boat cost? or a bigger ship?